Author Archives: Barbara Pattee

What’s Your Number?

“The beautiful part of writing is that you don’t have to get it right the first time, unlike say a brain surgeon.” – Robert Cormier

Grab your thesaurus! You need a stronger word to convey the anger your protagonist feels.

When reading your completed manuscript, look for apathetic words that don’t show the desire, despair, curiosity, danger, happiness, terror, or excitement you want the reader to feel. You may change a chosen word or phrase after reading aloud what you’ve written because the word just doesn’t fit. Perusing a dictionary or thesaurus helps in finding alternative expressions that work better.

But what about the numbers a writer selects in the titles of his stories. A particular number could hold some connection to the plot or sound better when read aloud. A writer may pick a different number even if it means adding or omitting characters or restructuring the story to fit.

Often a significant number conveys the meaning of a story much better than just words. Ray Bradbury wrote a short, futuristic story titled, The Fireman, where books are burned and reading is prohibited. There’s no spark to that title. However, a longer version published in 1951 with a more provocative title, Fahrenheit 451, worked better. Fahrenheit 451, the temperature of the combustion of paper, sparks more interest in the storyline.

Sometimes a number in an alliteration works. For example, 77 Sunset Strip, was the name of a popular television series from 1958 – 1964. The detectives could have lived anywhere on the Strip, but the address 77, worked better especially in their theme song.

Akira Kurosawa’s Seven Samurai, (an alliterative title) depicts the request from villagers asking for protection from bandits and the response of the seven men. The verbalization of that two-syllable number, seven, sounds much better than any other reasonably small number. Eleven might have been a decent alternate number choice, however, that would make for a more involved storyline. Too many characters get in the way of a good, tight story. The movie was remade in America as The Magnificent Seven (1960), The Return of the Magnificent Seven (1966), Guns of the Magnificent Seven (1969), and The Magnificent Seven (2016).

The comedy, 9 to 5, tells the story of three women who, tired of their boss’s bigoted condescending attitude, take revenge on him. Dolly Parton’s song, “Working 9 to 5,” from the movie was a catchy tune. The title could have been “8 to 4” but that doesn’t sound as impactful. I had a job where I worked from 8:30 to 4:30. Try putting that time frame into a cute song.

I saw the 1985 French comedic movie, Trois hommes et un couffin (translation: Three Men and a Cradle) which needed no translation. The 1987 Hollywood remake, Three Men and a Baby, told a similar story. Having two inept men take care of a baby wouldn’t provide enough comedic material. Four bumbling men would be too much. Three worked best.

In Les Trois Mousquetaires (translation: The Three Musketeers), Alexandre Dumas’s historical novel, there were four musketeers after D’Artagnan joined the powerful Athos, Aramis, and Porthos. Any remakes never altered the number of the original. Again, the number three worked best for this story.

Which movies and books can you recall that have a number in the title? What is the significance of that number?

 

 

 

Living Life

“Life outside your craft is just as important as practicing it, if not more.” Smart Blogger

When my date, Roger, saw my map with magnets of the twelve states I visited, he said, “We’ll have to fill in the rest.”

This man is a keeper, I thought. He likes to travel as much as I do. I removed most of the magnets and only retained magnets of the three states we visited together. The map would reflect our life together.

We married less than a year after our first date and have traveled to Canada, Mexico, the Bahamas, the Caribbean, Australia, New Zealand, and 48 of the 50 states collecting magnets along the way. We plan to visit the last two states on our list, Wyoming and South Dakota, within the next year or two. Some of our travels to the southern states gave me an opportunity to collect important data for my historical story-in-progress.

We enjoy learning about the history, culture, and way of life in the places we visit. I took notes every day on our trip to Australia and New Zealand and wrote a blog series for Deadwoodwriters.org about that wonderful experience.

Sampling the dishes common to places we visit is a special treat. Eating fresh pineapples in Hawaii, lobster in California, beignets in Louisiana, salmon in Alaska, crabs in Florida, and crocodile meat in Australia thrilled our taste buds. Crocodile meat tastes like chicken – tough chicken. Roger even devoured delicious green-lipped mussels in New Zealand.

Our grandchildren receive colorful postcards from us describing our adventures. From the time our granddaughter was six, she saved her postcards in an album. At age five, our grandson requested a map for Christmas so that he could put a tiny sticker on the places we traveled.

We collect magnets of the places we visit as well as data for future stories I may write.

I’ve learned to live life to the fullest giving me exciting things to write about. Are you living your best life?

This Is Us

 

“Do the one thing they always tell writers not to do. Watch T.V.”  From 99 Ways to Get Inspired to Write by Smart Blogger

You may discover interesting plot ideas in television shows; however, some programs may teach you about good quality writing.

Watching the television show, “This Is Us,” may help you learn to use flashbacks as well as flash-forwards effectively in your writing. If you’re not familiar with this show, please view it starting from the first episode. There was a jaw-dropping revelation in the last scene that set the pace for future episodes. When I viewed that episode and others a second time several weeks later, I picked up on the foreshadowing I missed the first time around.

This drama weaves the past and present seamlessly in every hour-long episode while portraying humor, diversity, obesity, career crises, abandonment, family dynamics, panic attacks, and death with an abundance of love, emotion, and passion.

Writers for this program are superb. They create surprising moments in every episode. A clue to the heart of the series is found on a lamp table in a seemingly insignificant photo of three apparent friends. This well-placed clue reminds me of a child’s shoe tossed aside and ignored in Mary Higgins Clark’s novel, Where Are the Children?

Without giving away the plot of “This Is Us,” I ask you to take notice of what a fireman did, now illegal, while standing in a hospital waiting room. I later realized that scene was a flashback. The superb writers returned later to that character, revealed his backstory and his significant connection to the main characters.

The appearance of a family friend in a different role, surprised me and generated extensive, detailed discussions the next day with avid fans of the show.

When you view the show, take note of the way the writers interweave the past with the present. You can learn good writing from them.

 

Begin Anew

“Whether you believe you can or you can’t – you’re right.” Henry Ford

We’re one month into working on our New Year’s resolutions. How many have you kept? What? You’ve given up already, not going to try again until next year? I know that the first of January marks a new beginning for many of us, but why does it have to be that date? Why not look at the first of each month as a time to make a change, start a trend, learn something new, or finish a project. What’s wrong with the beginning of the week? How about waking up each morning and saying, “Yes, I can.”

Do you want to lose weight? Learn a new language? Travel more? Or write that book you’ve thought about for far too long? Don’t give up just because you’re behind schedule. If you’re still breathing, you still have time to keep your resolutions.

Set measurable goals for yourself and record your progress. Renew that membership to the gym or start with vigorous daily walks. And don’t forget to add healthy recipes to your meal plan. Sign up for a language class online or at a local community college. Look through travel brochures, then book your next destination.

Take out your computer or that notebook collecting dust and continue working on your manuscript. Sometimes you’ll run into a problem with your story. If it’s not coming together the way you want it to, work on a different scene. Novels aren’t always written in chronological order. Some writers begin writing the end of their story before they know how the story will begin.

Today, right now, is a new beginning for you. Are you ready to “resolve” to make a change? How will you accomplish your goals?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Born to Write?

“The person born with a talent they are meant to use will find their greatest happiness in using it.” Johann Wolfgang von Goethe

I continue to write hoping to complete a 75,000-word story this year. Is this my true talent or an unrelenting drive? I write a monthly blog, short stories, and memoirs, but I want to do more. Do I keep the possibly unattainable goal of becoming a published novelist? Or should I admit this may be too much to hope for? Do you feel the same way and does this prevent you from achieving your goals?

I’ve tried to let go of the dream, but stories continue to invade my consciousness. Plot ideas come to me from tidbits of overheard conversations, intriguing quotes I’ve read, and scenes from books and movies. Of course, real life is rich with possible scenarios for novels.

For example, a family member told me the convoluted story of an estranged couple and their narrative resonated with me. That couple allowed memories of past relationships and current intruders to prevent them from consummating their romance. I plotted their romance, added a little spice and intrigue, and gave them a satisfactory outcome. The word count fell far short of what is expected of romance novels.

I put the manuscript aside knowing my work didn’t meet the criteria. But I can’t let the story go because it has many elements of stories that I like to read. I call them delicious romances with a little meat in them. More intrigue must be added, but it’s not easy without putting in too much fluff. I struggle writing longer manuscripts because I fear failure.

Discouraged from continuing my “hobby” of writing, I continued in secret. Shorter stories and memories were easy for me to complete without unwarranted attention. I knew if I failed at publishing a full-length story, then I would have to hear, “I told you so.”

I heard the following statement from the movie “Sing.” “Don’t let fear stop you from doing the thing you love.” Because writing gives me pleasure, I’ll repeat the quote to myself for encouragement as I continue to pursue my creative goal.

My commitments for 2017 are as follows:

  1. Continue blogging.
  2. Read a minimum of one book per month.
  3. Enter a writing contest.
  4. Finish writing this romance.

What are you committed to do this year?